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Tuesday, June 27, 2017

Frank

This is all about frank. Frank is a very tall and stretched man. He has nose that looks like a long bridge. His eyes are as clear as the shimmering ocean. He has dark brown hair that looks like the bark from an oak tree and smells like strawberry scented shampoo! His favourite thing to wear is a blue wastecoat with blouse underneath with bright Tele pants. He has two ears like an elephant  Frank works with his brother Jesse together they ... ROB TRAINS!!At least they get along " I guess" .
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6 comments:

  1. AnonymousJuly 3, 2017 at 12:03 PM

    Hi Ellie,
    My name is Mikaela and I'm a year 6 student at St. Bernadette's School. I like how you had lots of descriptive words in your work E.G his nose is like a long bridge, your writing was very interesting to read. Maybe next time you could draw a picture of Frank on google drawing to make me have a picture in my head of how he looks. What inspired you to write about Frank ?

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    1. AnonymousAugust 4, 2017 at 11:51 AM

      Hi Mikaela

      At school our teacher showed us a video of Frank and that's what inspired me

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  2. AnonymousJuly 3, 2017 at 12:08 PM

    Hi Ellie my name is Alex and I am a student from St. Bernadette's School. I like how you described Frank. I also like how you used some similes. Next time maybe you could reread your work and fix a few mistakes. I look forward to seeing more work from you Ellie.

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  3. AnonymousJuly 3, 2017 at 12:08 PM

    Hi Ellie, guess what, my name is Ellie too!! I'm from St Bernadette's School. I like how you described Frank, I did get a picture in my head, I also thought it was funny they robbed trains. Maybe next you could draw a picture to go with the story? I look forward to seeing more of your work.

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  4. AnonymousJuly 3, 2017 at 12:09 PM

    Hi Ellie, I'm Nika from St Bernadette's School. I like how you used lots of strong describing words. Maybe next time you could put a picture of what you think he looks like. Is this a real story ?

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  5. AnonymousAugust 4, 2017 at 11:54 AM

    Thank you all for the comments I really appreciate all the feedback🐵

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